Hack The Flab #11

Hack the flab from your writing or your readers might shout obscenities in your direction stop reading. Avoid the following 10 examples of flab:

  1. Eagerly – Weak Adverb. Replace with descriptive text. Ex. He waited eagerly. Better: He waited, eyes wide, smile from ear to ear.
  2. Eliminate altogether – Redundant Phrase. You don’t need altogether. Ex: We should reduce or eliminate altogether speeding ticket fines. Better: We should reduce or eliminate speeding ticket fines.
  3. Emergency situation – Redundant Phrase. You don’t need situation. Ex: We have an emergency situation at the school. Better: We have an emergency at the school.
  4. Empty out – Redundant Phrase. You don’t need out. Ex: Empty out the dishwasher. Better: Empty the dishwasher.
  5. End result – Redundant Phrase. You don’t need end. Ex: Study and the end results will please you. Better: Study and the results will please you.
  6. Encouragement – Nominalization (Wordiness introduced when someone uses the noun equivalent of a verb or adjective). Use the verb or adjective form for more powerful sentences. Ex: His encouragement helped my success. Better: He encouraged me and I succeeded.
  7. Eliminate entirely – Redundant Phrase. You don’t need entirely. Ex: We could eliminate entirely testing and students would still learn. Better: We could eliminate testing and students would still learn.
  8. Enter in – Redundant Phrase. You don’t need in. Ex: Enter in your name and email address. Better: Enter your name and email address.
  9. Equal to one another – Redundant Phrase. You don’t need to one another. Ex: They are equal to one another in size, but Joe is faster. Better: They are equal in size, but Joe is faster.
  10. Eradicate completely – Redundant Phrase. You don’t need completely. Ex: We must eradicate completely these roaches. Better: We must eradicate these roaches.
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2 Comments on “Hack The Flab #11”

  1. Paul Bottom says:

    Emergency situation is a common one. A similar one is what the TV weather people use,
    a “weather event.” I guess it makes it sound more exciting in their mind.

    A term that doesn’t fit into flab but is stupid is from a TV reporter who in talking about
    somebody’s funeral said the person would be “funeralized.”

  2. clare says:

    Paul – funeralized – lol – REALLY?! that’s funny AND stupid!

    Not for the person or their family – but TV reporters don’t always get it right on the fly do they?! We’re all human though, hopefully all trying to do our best! 🙂


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