Hack The Flab #8

Hack the flab from your writing or your readers might shout obscenities in your direction stop reading. Avoid the following 10 examples of flab:

  1. Comparison – Nominalization (Wordiness introduced when someone uses the noun equivalent of a verb or adjective). Use the verb or adjective form for more powerful sentences. Ex: He made a comparison with apples and oranges. Better: He compared apples with oranges.
  2. Compete against each other – Redundant Phrase. You don’t need against each other. Ex: They compete against each other. Better: They compete.
  3. Compete with each other – Redundant Phrase. You don’t need with each other. Ex: They compete with each other. Better: They compete.
  4. Completely Destroyed – Redundant Phrase. You don’t need completely. Ex: Joe completely destroyed his room. Better: Joe destroyed his room.
  5. Completely eliminate – Redundant Phrase. You don’t need completely. Ex: You must completely eliminate your foes. Better: You must eliminate your foes.
  6. Completely engulfed – Redundant Phrase. You don’t need completely. Ex: Flames completely engulfed the house. Better: Flames engulfed the house.
  7. Completely filled – Redundant Phrase. You don’t need completely. Ex: He completely filled his cup. Better: He filled his cup.
  8. Conclusion – Nominalization (Wordiness introduced when someone uses the noun equivalent of a verb or adjective). Use the verb or adjective form for more powerful sentences. Ex: His conclusion was she loved poetry. Better: He concluded she loved poetry.
  9. Connect together – Redundant Phrase. You don’t need together. Ex: Connect together the two wires. Better: Connect the two wires.
  10. Could – Authority Alert. If you believe something is true, don’t say, “It could do something,” say, “It will or would do something.” Ex. Following these tips could make you rich. Better: Following these tips will make you rich.
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